Tuesday, November 17, 2009

What do u think of my poem?

the assingment is create 2 short(10 lines) poems based on spiders or stars, 1 scientific free verse stating facts.....and 1 poetic..... i wnt to get a good grade....this is the poetic 1....cause the scientific 1 is boring and too ez.....i accpet all comments.....good or bad:





Shinning Stars





As I stare into the night sky





Little twinkles catch my eye





A little spec in the dark





A shining, shining little spark





Cloudless, blazing, burning bright





Illuminating up the night





The spirits of peasants, scholars and kings





Looking down on all living things





The very things of ancient lore





Giving light, forevermore

What do u think of my poem?
Not bad, thought i was reading the rhyme to twinkle twinkle little star for awhile.
Reply:very nice :)


i love poetry
Reply:minted lol!
Reply:very nice


hope u get a very good grade


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Reply:yo! That was good and no offense just telling u that it doesn't seem to talk about spiders or creepy things I was sort of dreamy like when u compared it to the night sky- but I liked it it was good for a guy?- I guess. Well don't listen to the mean comments those other people say I loved it!


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