Sunday, May 16, 2010

The Song Of A Lover...A LOVE POEM.....Do you like it?

THE SONG OF A LOVER By Jay, "The Silver Bells"





My love for you may seem so strange


But it is true and will not change


There may be days when you could meet


The high-held stars upon thy feet


And there may come another day


When red red rose shall turn all grey


The blazing sun shall lose his heat


And waxing moon shall lose her seat


All that was fair may shape to foul


The fairy doves shall start to howl


But dear my love, though seems so strange


Is true by heart and will not change





There may befall a time for thee


To watch ten mountains on a sea


And serpents that had crept on land


May take few legs enough to stand


The cuckoo, robin, lark and all


With broken wings to earth may fall


The tigers that had lambs to please


May repent and may plea for peace


And all the streams that ran from west


May cease a while and look for rest


But dear, my love though seems so strange


Is true by blood and will not change





But you may say that these are lies


Love fast is born and fast it dies


There is no heart that yet is true


Struck not by jealousies are few


With time that flees and flees apace


All men shall dress with new a face


But dear when all my time shall pass


And I shall have a bed on grass


O come and meet me at my grave


There shall be daisies where you rave


They bloom where they had buried me


And they all blossom but for thee


For dear, my love though seems so strange


Is true by soul and will not change

The Song Of A Lover...A LOVE POEM.....Do you like it?
It is a beautiful and heartfelt poem.


She is very lucky to have such love, and you to feel this love.


Nice work:)
Reply:A beautiful, musical song/poem illustrating that love is eternal. It is not true that "Love fast is born and fast it dies," for there are those who can love until their bed is "on grass."


I admire all your poetry, no matter the theme, meter, or rhyme scheme. All of it seems perfect to me.
Reply:Jay, you should tell them where you live and which languages you speak. It will make them cry when they find that English is a second language for you. TD
Reply:Amazing, Jay. Absolutely amazing.
Reply:Well done. My compliments.
Reply:Yes. It sounds and looks perfect.
Reply:Pity we are only able to award one star.


I'd give you a Galaxy.
Reply:I like this, and tried it to several tunes I know. It fits well on an old confederate marching song of the civil war.


When Johnny Comes Marching Home.


I tried it to a boogie beat, and it fit the music, but just didn't seem quite right as a match to the subject.
Reply:Are you sure you aren't the reincarnation of one W.Shakespeare? It sounds very like him to me, or as he would write if he were to walk the earth to-day.





It its good to read a well-crafted verse such as this, maybe we would-be poets and seasoned poets could try to follow in your footsteps.


No promises, but I'm going to have a damn good try.


Well done,
Reply:Its not often I say this, but this is an amazing poem. I think it's the best I have read on Yahoo answers. You have a gift!





One tiny criticism, what do you mean by "there shall be daisies where you rave?". Where i come from rave means hardcore partying! Or to "rant and rave" which is comparable to some form of hysterics I guess, but I think contextually that line could be slightly tweaked.





Apart from that, the meter, rhyme and imagery are all very powerful and full of real emotion.





Really beautiful.





Hope that helps.

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