Sunday, May 16, 2010

A small poem "The Moon"?

Its a few weeks old but do you like?





Luminous moon


Enlighten the night


Twinkling stars


Glowing with light


Behind is the sun


Keeping it bright


Shining in darkness


It blazes alight.





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A small poem "The Moon"?
I like the intermittent rhyming scheme. I like the words used.


For me, it has this childishly cute feel to it. It's like one of those catchy rhymes that parents would tell their kids at a campfire and would get passed on. It's simplistic but that only helps its image and might have even been deliberate.
Reply:I LOVE IT!!!! It's so cute! especially since it's short nd you didn't try to force extra in. I Love it! great job and props to you :)
Reply:good


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