Hows this poem ?

There is another special place


Which passes those mountain folk


Every night


in those cold Canadian rockies


weather spitting snow %26amp; cold


They get a rush of pleasure


Warm talk


Focus of faith


Sacred city


Eternal, redemption,


bursting pride


Lion hearted for emotional tides


As they watch those east bound shooting stars


Blaze across the starry sky


Water droplets from maples leaves


Shower down from their limbs


Resting upon the autumn ground

Hows this poem ?
so good.excellent see everybody is asking your age because everyone wants to know.you are superstar for poem.keep it up.god bless you
Reply:Is not poetic at all. The art of writing requires learning, and a lot of reading first.


Sorry
Reply:V.Good - (How old are you?).....for a first poem.





Don't get offended. The way poets do it is by using literary techniques. For example, metaphors, similies, oxymorons etc. This livens up a poem. Yours certainly is emotive, just lacks the other stuff





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Reply:It's interesting. I think you have some good ideas going. It could be better if you took out the starry sky and put another descriptive word in the because you already have shooting stars so that's a bit redundant. I really like the rest.
Reply:good poem, but yeah, i agree with the guy above me

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